My dearest friend
- LittleSamurai
- Vasto Lorde
- Viestit: 3463
- Liittynyt: Ma Elo 09, 2004 12:51
- Paikkakunta: Igaalinen Gakure no Sato
Okei, eli englanninkielinen aine. Osallistui kilpailuun, mutta lukuisin virheiden takia se hylättiin. Ja koska aihe oli rakkaus, en ollut vahvoilla, vaikka tarina kuulemma oli ehana ja koskettava.. Minä vain en osaa romantikoida.
Annan sen siis nyt teidän arvosteltavaksenne.. ^__^
(älkääkä kysykö miksi sen nimi on Tenshi, olin silloin kuumeessa.. <_<)
My Dearest friend
One bright winter day he just came to our class. "Listen", said the teacher, "This is our new student, Tenshi. He will study there, so be nice to him."
Tenshi was adopted from the States to here. He was every girl's daydream; long blonde hair, navy blue eyes and a long coat, the same colour as his eyes. In my mind he looked ill. He was too thing and he always looked tired.
Six month passed, and I fell in love with him. Then came the day before our summer holiday, when one of my friends came to me and said that Tenshi had asked her if I was free. That evening, when I was going to sleep he came to my window. "I'm sorry if I woke you up, but I have something to tell to you. And I am very very sorry that I came to the window, but it is kinda more romantic.. I just don't wanna scare your parents."
I said that coming to the window would scare them more, and he grinned. He came inside in to my room, took my hand and looked me in the eyes.
"I have loved you since that moment I saw you to the first time. But I'm sorry that I can't be your boyfriend, expecting that you want me, because I have cancer in my brain and it will kill me. But I can be your dearest friend, because you are already mine."
But I wanted to be his girlfriend, and he accepted that.
That was the best year of my life. I was there, holding his hand when he died, sleeping peacefully. And that same evening, I went to the roof of the hospital and jumped into eternity, where he was waiting to me.
Annan sen siis nyt teidän arvosteltavaksenne.. ^__^
(älkääkä kysykö miksi sen nimi on Tenshi, olin silloin kuumeessa.. <_<)
My Dearest friend
One bright winter day he just came to our class. "Listen", said the teacher, "This is our new student, Tenshi. He will study there, so be nice to him."
Tenshi was adopted from the States to here. He was every girl's daydream; long blonde hair, navy blue eyes and a long coat, the same colour as his eyes. In my mind he looked ill. He was too thing and he always looked tired.
Six month passed, and I fell in love with him. Then came the day before our summer holiday, when one of my friends came to me and said that Tenshi had asked her if I was free. That evening, when I was going to sleep he came to my window. "I'm sorry if I woke you up, but I have something to tell to you. And I am very very sorry that I came to the window, but it is kinda more romantic.. I just don't wanna scare your parents."
I said that coming to the window would scare them more, and he grinned. He came inside in to my room, took my hand and looked me in the eyes.
"I have loved you since that moment I saw you to the first time. But I'm sorry that I can't be your boyfriend, expecting that you want me, because I have cancer in my brain and it will kill me. But I can be your dearest friend, because you are already mine."
But I wanted to be his girlfriend, and he accepted that.
That was the best year of my life. I was there, holding his hand when he died, sleeping peacefully. And that same evening, I went to the roof of the hospital and jumped into eternity, where he was waiting to me.
- Albino
- ANBU Captain
- Viestit: 1382
- Liittynyt: Su Loka 17, 2004 13:12
- Paikkakunta: Wonkan suklaatehdas
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- Missing-nin
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- Yoshi
- ANBU Captain
- Viestit: 1306
- Liittynyt: Ke Joulu 08, 2004 18:45
- Paikkakunta: Helsinki
Oih.. Ihana. ^^ Laitoinpa soimaan Sadde and Sorrowsin niin sai lisää tunnetta. ^^ Ihanan haikea ja tuollainen koskettava juuri. ^^ Virheitä en nähnyt, koska en ole maailman paras enkussa joten en itsekkään osaisi täysin virheetöntä tekstiä kirjoittaa ja en tiedä mitän tuossa ne pitäisi olla oikein.. (ellet ole korjaillut virheitä ennen tänne postaustasi) Sopivan lyhyt oli. ^^ Tuohan voisi myös oikeassa elämässä tapahtua.. Kait. :3 Ehkä se oli liian sellaista pehmeää, mutta se teki siitä tälläisen ihanan pikku tarinan. ^_____^
- Hikaru-chan
- Academy Teacher
- Viestit: 315
- Liittynyt: Ma Huhti 11, 2005 18:51
- Paikkakunta: Tampere
- LittleSamurai
- Vasto Lorde
- Viestit: 3463
- Liittynyt: Ma Elo 09, 2004 12:51
- Paikkakunta: Igaalinen Gakure no Sato
- LittleSamurai
- Vasto Lorde
- Viestit: 3463
- Liittynyt: Ma Elo 09, 2004 12:51
- Paikkakunta: Igaalinen Gakure no Sato
Heh, se johtuu siitä että tuo tarina piti saada mahtumaan tiettyyn määrään sanoja..Kaya-Chan kirjoitti:Aaaaw ~ <3 Tämä oli niin kaunis mutta eikö kaikki tapahtunut hieman liian nopeasti..? Minusta tuntuu, että tämä olisi jonkun lyhytmuotoinen elämänkerta, mutta silti kaunis sellainen
Kiitos kommenteista!! ~<3
Yleisön toivomuksesta voisin kirjoittaa jtn samantyyppistä taas seuraavaksi, siitä tulee sitten vähän melankolisempi..