Nonnih, täälläkin on vihdoinkin päästy asiaan ja saatu ihan yaoia kehiin. Pitäisköhän itsekin kokeilla...
Mutta asiaan. Sujuvaa kieltä, ei häiritseviä virheitä jne tämänhän jo tietenkin tiedätkin :) Uchihacest avaa tiettyjä mahdollisuuksia, joita on hankala soveltaa muissa parituksissa (mm. todella vahva alisteisuus) ja joita olet käyttänyt kivasti hyväksesi. Tarinoihin (ja niiden tunnelmiin) pääsi hyvin sisälle ja toimivat hienosti ns. hetken kuvauksina. Ehkä parasta one-shoteissa on se, että ne antavat lukijalle enemmän tilaa rakentaa tarinalle lisää kehystä. Toisaalta lyhyet tarinat jättävät aina kaipaamaan lisää. Onko se sitten huono asia vai ei. Taitaa mennä liiaksi analyysiksi, sori. Odotan innolla lisää kirjoituksiasi.
Uchihacest-laari. K-18 ~Update!~
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Mirha
- Mindfuck
- Viestit: 1723
- Liittynyt: Pe Syys 16, 2005 14:35
Teen comebackin. Tai sitten minulla ei ole muutakaan tekemistä xD Kuitenkin. Tässä taatusti kaivattu Uchiha-annoksenne! *kuuntelee hiljaisuutta* Tällä kertaa extra-angstilla varustettuna. Vähän erilaista kuin mihin olette tottuneet. Inhorealismi rocks.
Jos ette tykkää verta ja suolenpätkiä -jutusta niin jättäkää lukematta. Oikeasti.
Ja englanti kielenä koska en osaa enää ajatella saati kirjoittaa suomeksi.
Nimi: After All
Paritus: Uchihacest (tavallaan)
Ikäsuositus: K-18
Varoitukset: Angstia, kuolemaa, masokismia, väkivaltaa, lisää angstia, sooloseksiä, lisää angstia, angstia kertaa kaksi.
After all
Sasuke's hands were shaking. His eyes were wide open; not because of fear but because of uncertainty. The katana was buried in his brother's chest up to the hilt. Itachi's hands were holding Sasuke's hands that held the katana.
The warm blood ran by their hands and dropped on the ground. Itachi was so warm… Sasuke could not remember his brother ever feeling this warm, this close to him.
There was a smirk-like smile on his brother's lips and he coughed, blood dropping from the sides of his mouth.
Sasuke was terrified. They had not been his hands that had pushed the blade through the flesh. They had not been his. He had brought the tip of the blade to touch his brother's shirt, but it had been Itachi, whose warm hands had wrapped around Sasuke's and slowly pulled the blade closer, burying it deep inside his body.
"You still lack hatred", Itachi said. His eyes were closed and he opened them to see Sasuke's pale face. He let go of the blade and ran his bloody hand across Sasuke's face.
The younger Uchiha started as he felt the copper-like taste in his lips and he pulled the blade out, letting even more blood run out of the wound. The katana dropped on the ground. Sasuke swallowed, the smell of blood strong all around him.
Itachi dropped on his knees, pulling Sasuke down with him. He coughed, blood running down his chin and neck.
Sasuke felt his brother's hands around him, like sucking life out of him, trying to stay strong for the final minutes of his life. Itachi was so warm. His heart beat was weak, his breathing frantic with coughs. Itachi's face was so close to him, their Sharingan eyes staring at each other.
Their noses were almost touching. So close but so far. So close to be separated for ever.
Sasuke licked his lips, tasting the blood. He forced his lips to a smirk; Itachi was finally going to die. Although it had not been Sasuke alone to do this. Somehow he felt empty, like he had lost something.
He stared at Itachi, the suffering face of his brother, watched and felt how it got closer to him, felt the warm breath against his face. Itachi's lips touched his, brushing weakly over them. Sasuke kissed him back fiercely, wrapping his arms around his neck. He let his tongue enter the bloody mouth and felt Itachi's tongue playing with his for a while. Itachi bit Sasuke's lip until it bled and sucked out some blood.
There were tears in Sasuke's eyes as their lips parted. They stared at each other, eyes red of the Sharingan.
One more kiss. Sasuke leaned over to kiss Itachi, bewildered of the feeling rushing through his body. He did not want it to end. The warmth of his brother, the disappearing life, the approaching death excited him too much.
Eventually he pulled away and stroked his brother's hair. Itachi's eyes were half shut. Sasuke licked his bruised lip and tasted the tears and the blood.
Itachi's breathing had almost stopped and he leaned on Sasuke's shoulder.
After a minute or two Itachi's heart stopped beating and Sasuke lay his brother's dead body on the ground, tears in his eyes.
***
Kakashi had come over to see him two days after he had come home covered in his brother's blood. Sasuke had not said much to his sensei; he had muttered something about that he would have to deal with this by himself. However, Kakashi sat in his room, looking at Sasuke who lay on his bed, for five hours. He saw the tears in Sasuke's eyes. He saw Sasuke's hands grab the sheets in his restless sleep. He heard Sasuke repeating his brother's name. He witnessed Sasuke wake up sweating, screaming.
Sasuke knew everything was not okay. He had been wearing the blood-stained clothes until Kakashi had forcefully taken him to the shower and dressed him in clean clothes. Kakashi had brought him food and told him the latest news. However, Sasuke did not eat much, he tasted some and stared somewhere in front of him.
It had taken a month before he had gathered the needed strength to leave his apartment. Meeting Naruto had not been easy. Meeting Sakura had been even worse. They kept telling him that he did not look so good and asking if he was okay.
Sasuke had left them early that day, telling them that he was not okay and that he needed sleep. Naruto tried to cheer him up by some lousy joke Sasuke did not want to get. Sakura had beaten the hell out of Naruto and told him to leave Sasuke alone if he wished to be alone. After that Sakura had herself asked if Sasuke had needed company. Sasuke had told her that the both of them were annoying.
Sasuke went home and headed straight to the shower, his clothes still on. He turned the water on and leaned against the wall, letting the tears run down his cheeks. He could still taste his brother's blood, feel the lips against his. It was something he had always wanted but did not know where it would be found. And now it was gone. Gone.
The sound of the water covered his crying voice and he started to take his clothes off. He imagined the hands not being his, but Itachi's. He ran his fingers gently across his naked body and gasped as they touched his semi-erected cock. He burst out crying as his hands wrapped around his length, they were not Itachi's hands that had been so warm around his face.
He dropped on the floor, rubbing himself and crying. The crying changed into moaning as he neared his climax and came to the bathroom floor, screaming his brother's name.
He turned the water off and left the bathroom. Wet footprints marked his way from the bathroom to his bed. He reached to a box underneath his bed and pulled it out.
The black cloak with red clouds was stained in blood. The katana was bloody too. Sasuke pulled the cloak over his wet body and pulled the katana off the scabbard. He looked at the bloody blade; not all of the blood was Itachi's. Since Sasuke had come home he had made a small cut somewhere to his body every day. Last night he had cried and cut his left arm. The wound had become deeper than Sasuke had meant to. Still it was relieving to see blood.
This time he ran the tip of the blade around his chest. Sasuke bit his lip as the blade scarred his pale skin. After a couple of minutes his chest said "Itachi", and Sasuke dropped the katana on the floor squeezing his eyes shut not to see the name he had carved to his skin.
He wrapped the Akatsuki cloak tighter around him, smelling his brother's bittersweet scent as well as the blood in it. It felt so safe, like it was Itachi next to him, when the familiar scent filled his mind and heart. Eventually he fell asleep.
***
It had been four months after Sasuke came home covered in his brother's blood when Kakashi started to worry. He had not seen Sasuke or heard from him in a week. Usually Sasuke would show up somewhere, sitting and thinking, maybe crying or something. The boy was badly depressed and he had been talked to by a psychiatrist, but Sasuke – as usual – was not the talking type. The therapy sessions had ended after the first month since Sasuke refused to show up.
Kakashi was knocking on Sasuke's door, but no one came to open it. He had the key and he opened the door carefully.
It did not seem like Sasuke's place. He had always been organized and kept his home clean. This time the windows were closed with curtains and only a little light got through the curtains into the dark apartment. There was rotten food on the table. Clothes were scattered all over the floor. Photos were turned over on the tables.
The apartment smelled like death.
"Sasuke!" Kakashi exclaimed. No answer.
The bathroom had its lights on, and Kakashi went to check it out. Sasuke was not there, but the floor was covered with stuff that looked like come. Kakashi grimaced at the sight and moved towards the bedroom.
The door was ajar, and Kakashi felt his heart jump. He was afraid to open the door and find something he did not want to find.
The door to the dark room opened with a creak. The irony smell that was death was stronger here. Kakashi saw something on the bed and he turned the lights on.
Sasuke lay on the bed. The lower half of his body was covered with an Akatsuki cloak. The upper half of his body – as well as most of the bed – was covered with blood. Kakashi ran over to him, only to see that his heart was no longer beating.
Kakashi kneeled next to Sasuke's bed, terrified at the sight.
Sasuke's wrists were slit, his body was badly cut. The bloody sword lay next to him on the sheets that had sometimes been white.
There was something carved to Sasuke's chest. It was written in awkward letters and said "Itachi got me. I'm with him now". Kakashi felt like choking. He looked around and noticed that there were bloody fingerprints on the wall next to the bed, as well as some words written in blood that said "death" "love" "lust" "sin" and "brother".
The expression on Sasuke's face was calm, almost peaceful. Kakashi lifted the cloak to see that Sasuke was naked under it and that the lining of the cloak was covered in his come. His cock was stained by his blood and had multiple small wounds.
Kakashi could not help the tears coming. He took Sasuke's bloody, cold hand in his and held it tightly.
Naruto found them fifteen minutes later after seeing that the door to Sasuke's apartment was wide open. Naruto was as shocked as he was. Kakashi told him to go away and get Tsunade. After Naruto had gone - so reluctantly that Kakashi had to yell at him with his cracking voice - Kakashi stood up and wiped the tears from his eyes. He walked to Sasuke's linen closet and took out a white sheet. He spread it over Sasuke's dead body and watched as the blood that had not yet dried spotted the fabric here and there.
He sat on the floor, leaning to the wall. He buried his face to his hands and cried until he felt Tsunade's hand on his shoulder.
He stood up and looked at the Fifth Hokage with sad eyes. Tsunade nodded and asked if she could see Sasuke for herself. Kakashi told Naruto to wait outside. The young ninja obeyed hesitantly, tears running down his cheeks. Naruto closed the door behind him and heard Tsunade burst into tears.
-End-
Jos ette tykkää verta ja suolenpätkiä -jutusta niin jättäkää lukematta. Oikeasti.
Ja englanti kielenä koska en osaa enää ajatella saati kirjoittaa suomeksi.
Nimi: After All
Paritus: Uchihacest (tavallaan)
Ikäsuositus: K-18
Varoitukset: Angstia, kuolemaa, masokismia, väkivaltaa, lisää angstia, sooloseksiä, lisää angstia, angstia kertaa kaksi.
After all
Sasuke's hands were shaking. His eyes were wide open; not because of fear but because of uncertainty. The katana was buried in his brother's chest up to the hilt. Itachi's hands were holding Sasuke's hands that held the katana.
The warm blood ran by their hands and dropped on the ground. Itachi was so warm… Sasuke could not remember his brother ever feeling this warm, this close to him.
There was a smirk-like smile on his brother's lips and he coughed, blood dropping from the sides of his mouth.
Sasuke was terrified. They had not been his hands that had pushed the blade through the flesh. They had not been his. He had brought the tip of the blade to touch his brother's shirt, but it had been Itachi, whose warm hands had wrapped around Sasuke's and slowly pulled the blade closer, burying it deep inside his body.
"You still lack hatred", Itachi said. His eyes were closed and he opened them to see Sasuke's pale face. He let go of the blade and ran his bloody hand across Sasuke's face.
The younger Uchiha started as he felt the copper-like taste in his lips and he pulled the blade out, letting even more blood run out of the wound. The katana dropped on the ground. Sasuke swallowed, the smell of blood strong all around him.
Itachi dropped on his knees, pulling Sasuke down with him. He coughed, blood running down his chin and neck.
Sasuke felt his brother's hands around him, like sucking life out of him, trying to stay strong for the final minutes of his life. Itachi was so warm. His heart beat was weak, his breathing frantic with coughs. Itachi's face was so close to him, their Sharingan eyes staring at each other.
Their noses were almost touching. So close but so far. So close to be separated for ever.
Sasuke licked his lips, tasting the blood. He forced his lips to a smirk; Itachi was finally going to die. Although it had not been Sasuke alone to do this. Somehow he felt empty, like he had lost something.
He stared at Itachi, the suffering face of his brother, watched and felt how it got closer to him, felt the warm breath against his face. Itachi's lips touched his, brushing weakly over them. Sasuke kissed him back fiercely, wrapping his arms around his neck. He let his tongue enter the bloody mouth and felt Itachi's tongue playing with his for a while. Itachi bit Sasuke's lip until it bled and sucked out some blood.
There were tears in Sasuke's eyes as their lips parted. They stared at each other, eyes red of the Sharingan.
One more kiss. Sasuke leaned over to kiss Itachi, bewildered of the feeling rushing through his body. He did not want it to end. The warmth of his brother, the disappearing life, the approaching death excited him too much.
Eventually he pulled away and stroked his brother's hair. Itachi's eyes were half shut. Sasuke licked his bruised lip and tasted the tears and the blood.
Itachi's breathing had almost stopped and he leaned on Sasuke's shoulder.
After a minute or two Itachi's heart stopped beating and Sasuke lay his brother's dead body on the ground, tears in his eyes.
***
Kakashi had come over to see him two days after he had come home covered in his brother's blood. Sasuke had not said much to his sensei; he had muttered something about that he would have to deal with this by himself. However, Kakashi sat in his room, looking at Sasuke who lay on his bed, for five hours. He saw the tears in Sasuke's eyes. He saw Sasuke's hands grab the sheets in his restless sleep. He heard Sasuke repeating his brother's name. He witnessed Sasuke wake up sweating, screaming.
Sasuke knew everything was not okay. He had been wearing the blood-stained clothes until Kakashi had forcefully taken him to the shower and dressed him in clean clothes. Kakashi had brought him food and told him the latest news. However, Sasuke did not eat much, he tasted some and stared somewhere in front of him.
It had taken a month before he had gathered the needed strength to leave his apartment. Meeting Naruto had not been easy. Meeting Sakura had been even worse. They kept telling him that he did not look so good and asking if he was okay.
Sasuke had left them early that day, telling them that he was not okay and that he needed sleep. Naruto tried to cheer him up by some lousy joke Sasuke did not want to get. Sakura had beaten the hell out of Naruto and told him to leave Sasuke alone if he wished to be alone. After that Sakura had herself asked if Sasuke had needed company. Sasuke had told her that the both of them were annoying.
Sasuke went home and headed straight to the shower, his clothes still on. He turned the water on and leaned against the wall, letting the tears run down his cheeks. He could still taste his brother's blood, feel the lips against his. It was something he had always wanted but did not know where it would be found. And now it was gone. Gone.
The sound of the water covered his crying voice and he started to take his clothes off. He imagined the hands not being his, but Itachi's. He ran his fingers gently across his naked body and gasped as they touched his semi-erected cock. He burst out crying as his hands wrapped around his length, they were not Itachi's hands that had been so warm around his face.
He dropped on the floor, rubbing himself and crying. The crying changed into moaning as he neared his climax and came to the bathroom floor, screaming his brother's name.
He turned the water off and left the bathroom. Wet footprints marked his way from the bathroom to his bed. He reached to a box underneath his bed and pulled it out.
The black cloak with red clouds was stained in blood. The katana was bloody too. Sasuke pulled the cloak over his wet body and pulled the katana off the scabbard. He looked at the bloody blade; not all of the blood was Itachi's. Since Sasuke had come home he had made a small cut somewhere to his body every day. Last night he had cried and cut his left arm. The wound had become deeper than Sasuke had meant to. Still it was relieving to see blood.
This time he ran the tip of the blade around his chest. Sasuke bit his lip as the blade scarred his pale skin. After a couple of minutes his chest said "Itachi", and Sasuke dropped the katana on the floor squeezing his eyes shut not to see the name he had carved to his skin.
He wrapped the Akatsuki cloak tighter around him, smelling his brother's bittersweet scent as well as the blood in it. It felt so safe, like it was Itachi next to him, when the familiar scent filled his mind and heart. Eventually he fell asleep.
***
It had been four months after Sasuke came home covered in his brother's blood when Kakashi started to worry. He had not seen Sasuke or heard from him in a week. Usually Sasuke would show up somewhere, sitting and thinking, maybe crying or something. The boy was badly depressed and he had been talked to by a psychiatrist, but Sasuke – as usual – was not the talking type. The therapy sessions had ended after the first month since Sasuke refused to show up.
Kakashi was knocking on Sasuke's door, but no one came to open it. He had the key and he opened the door carefully.
It did not seem like Sasuke's place. He had always been organized and kept his home clean. This time the windows were closed with curtains and only a little light got through the curtains into the dark apartment. There was rotten food on the table. Clothes were scattered all over the floor. Photos were turned over on the tables.
The apartment smelled like death.
"Sasuke!" Kakashi exclaimed. No answer.
The bathroom had its lights on, and Kakashi went to check it out. Sasuke was not there, but the floor was covered with stuff that looked like come. Kakashi grimaced at the sight and moved towards the bedroom.
The door was ajar, and Kakashi felt his heart jump. He was afraid to open the door and find something he did not want to find.
The door to the dark room opened with a creak. The irony smell that was death was stronger here. Kakashi saw something on the bed and he turned the lights on.
Sasuke lay on the bed. The lower half of his body was covered with an Akatsuki cloak. The upper half of his body – as well as most of the bed – was covered with blood. Kakashi ran over to him, only to see that his heart was no longer beating.
Kakashi kneeled next to Sasuke's bed, terrified at the sight.
Sasuke's wrists were slit, his body was badly cut. The bloody sword lay next to him on the sheets that had sometimes been white.
There was something carved to Sasuke's chest. It was written in awkward letters and said "Itachi got me. I'm with him now". Kakashi felt like choking. He looked around and noticed that there were bloody fingerprints on the wall next to the bed, as well as some words written in blood that said "death" "love" "lust" "sin" and "brother".
The expression on Sasuke's face was calm, almost peaceful. Kakashi lifted the cloak to see that Sasuke was naked under it and that the lining of the cloak was covered in his come. His cock was stained by his blood and had multiple small wounds.
Kakashi could not help the tears coming. He took Sasuke's bloody, cold hand in his and held it tightly.
Naruto found them fifteen minutes later after seeing that the door to Sasuke's apartment was wide open. Naruto was as shocked as he was. Kakashi told him to go away and get Tsunade. After Naruto had gone - so reluctantly that Kakashi had to yell at him with his cracking voice - Kakashi stood up and wiped the tears from his eyes. He walked to Sasuke's linen closet and took out a white sheet. He spread it over Sasuke's dead body and watched as the blood that had not yet dried spotted the fabric here and there.
He sat on the floor, leaning to the wall. He buried his face to his hands and cried until he felt Tsunade's hand on his shoulder.
He stood up and looked at the Fifth Hokage with sad eyes. Tsunade nodded and asked if she could see Sasuke for herself. Kakashi told Naruto to wait outside. The young ninja obeyed hesitantly, tears running down his cheeks. Naruto closed the door behind him and heard Tsunade burst into tears.
-End-
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Ave-chan
- Onigiri desu~
- Viestit: 1566
- Liittynyt: Su Touko 15, 2005 23:17
- Paikkakunta: Uleåborg
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Pistit hiljaiseksi tällä ficillä... ;___; Kauhean surullinen loppu hetkenä, jollon ite oon aika hyvällä tuulella :/ Pelottava tämä oli siinä mielessä, että ItaSasu alkaa yhä enemmän ja enemmän saada jonkinlaista... hyväksyntää mielessäni, ei yhtään kiitos näiden ficcien :D
Emminä tiiä mitä tästä sanois. Vaikka paritus ei ole suosikkejani, oli se kuitenkin kirjoitettu hyvin, älyttömän hyvin! Sä osaat ilmeisesti käyttää kieltäs :P (nyt tuli vatsanpohjaan sellanen vastenmielinen tunne ku kaikki mielikuvat visualisoituu kunnolla mieleen @__@ veri, viiltely ja vängstäys... ;__;) 'Come' ja 'cum' ovat ilmeisesti sama asia, sitä piti vähän miettiä ku oon useammin törmännyt tähän 'cum'-sanaan. Tämä ficci antoi taas ihan uuden merkityksen sanoille "Come Come Paradise" .__.
Hmm. Jotenkin silmiään irti itkevä Kakashi tuntui vähän OOC:ltä, itse en oikein ymmärtänyt miksi O_o Tai siis että miksi hän alkoi itkemään, meinaan. Muuten kyllä oikein... noh, omalla erikoisella tavallaan viihdyttävä gorehtava ficci, josta pidin itseäni huolestuttavan paljon ^^
Pistit hiljaiseksi tällä ficillä... ;___; Kauhean surullinen loppu hetkenä, jollon ite oon aika hyvällä tuulella :/ Pelottava tämä oli siinä mielessä, että ItaSasu alkaa yhä enemmän ja enemmän saada jonkinlaista... hyväksyntää mielessäni, ei yhtään kiitos näiden ficcien :D
Emminä tiiä mitä tästä sanois. Vaikka paritus ei ole suosikkejani, oli se kuitenkin kirjoitettu hyvin, älyttömän hyvin! Sä osaat ilmeisesti käyttää kieltäs :P (nyt tuli vatsanpohjaan sellanen vastenmielinen tunne ku kaikki mielikuvat visualisoituu kunnolla mieleen @__@ veri, viiltely ja vängstäys... ;__;) 'Come' ja 'cum' ovat ilmeisesti sama asia, sitä piti vähän miettiä ku oon useammin törmännyt tähän 'cum'-sanaan. Tämä ficci antoi taas ihan uuden merkityksen sanoille "Come Come Paradise" .__.
Hmm. Jotenkin silmiään irti itkevä Kakashi tuntui vähän OOC:ltä, itse en oikein ymmärtänyt miksi O_o Tai siis että miksi hän alkoi itkemään, meinaan. Muuten kyllä oikein... noh, omalla erikoisella tavallaan viihdyttävä gorehtava ficci, josta pidin itseäni huolestuttavan paljon ^^
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Rinde
- fakkuoshimashita
- Viestit: 1347
- Liittynyt: Ti Tammi 17, 2006 19:48
- Paikkakunta: lol tokio
- Viesti:
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Mirha
- Mindfuck
- Viestit: 1723
- Liittynyt: Pe Syys 16, 2005 14:35
Öhöm... Viimeiset chapterit ovat olleet työn alla joulusta lähtien... Pitää kattoa jos tässä joskus saisi ne julkaisukuntoon. Inspiraatio on ollut poissaoleva ihan kaiken fanfictionin suhteen.Rinde kirjoitti:Tulipa mieleen... Mirha, jatkuuko ihana LMR jossain vaikka AFF onkin ihan horo? Olen ihan koukussa siihen (ja se sai mut piirtämään hassua fanartia jonka laitan kyllä tänne kiitokseksi kuhan saan skannattua) ja alan hajota tuohon AFFään.
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Rinde
- fakkuoshimashita
- Viestit: 1347
- Liittynyt: Ti Tammi 17, 2006 19:48
- Paikkakunta: lol tokio
- Viesti:
Hyvää jaksaa odottaaMirha kirjoitti:Öhöm... Viimeiset chapterit ovat olleet työn alla joulusta lähtien... Pitää kattoa jos tässä joskus saisi ne julkaisukuntoon. Inspiraatio on ollut poissaoleva ihan kaiken fanfictionin suhteen.Rinde kirjoitti:Tulipa mieleen... Mirha, jatkuuko ihana LMR jossain vaikka AFF onkin ihan horo? Olen ihan koukussa siihen (ja se sai mut piirtämään hassua fanartia jonka laitan kyllä tänne kiitokseksi kuhan saan skannattua) ja alan hajota tuohon AFFään.